Dear Diary,
Why am I here? Why me of all people? I just don't understand. My date with Adam went so well that night and I should have just let him take me home instead of insisting I take a cab. Everything was going so well. He could've been the one that would be the father of my two boys. Its been so hard for them growing up without a dad. They see other boys on the baseball field playing catch with their dads and all they have is a lousy mother. If I had just gone with Adam this would not have happened. I wouldn't be here in this....this...cage. I'm not an animal and yet he treats me like one. He stuck me in the back of his car after he picked me up on the street after my date and drove me back to his smelly, low class appartment. He shoved me in a dog pen in his basement and he brings meager meals. Mostly gruel and a piece of bread. I don't know what he plans to do with me. He took all of my money and my cell phone. He calls me Moira and I can't stand it. I can't stop sobbing. I can't bear this much longer. What about my kids? Where are they? Did he hurt them? Will I ever see them again? I have so many questions that have been left unanswered, I don't know what to do. I have to remember to hide this paper as soon as I'm finished. I won't talk to him and I definitely won't let him read my thoughts. He absolutely disgusts me. I'll try to write again soon.
-Karen
-Melissa
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I don't want to seem like I'm picking on you, but there are some things in Karen's journal entry that don't make sense.
1. If she's a "strong" woman, she probably wouldn't call herself a "lousy mother". I'd bet she's a wonderful mother. She doesn't really need a man to help her. In fact, after this entire ordeal, she might not want any men around. She could become androphobic.
2. Vince took everything she had on her, including her clothes. She's in a cage, wearing nothing but a dog collar, a chastity belt, and possibly handcuffs. Where would she get paper? What would she write with? Where would she hide the paper?
3. Does it really make sense for her to use ellipses, and repeat the word "this" in a hand written journal entry?
- Paula
I was trying to point the story in a different direction or write from a different perspective because I'm not really a fan of writing about sex slaves. But thank you for your criticism. I don't know how she got paper I was thinking about that while I was writing it but I wanted to write something from her perspective on things and there was really no other way to do so then to have her write on paper.
She's not a voluntary sex slave. We're writing about assholes who kidnap innocent people and do terrible things to them. It happens all the time. That's kinda the point.
Have you ever seen the movie Quills? The Marquis de Sade is in an asylum. Being locked up is driving him crazy. He writes erotic stories as an outlet. They don't like his stories, so they take his parchment, quills and ink. He starts to write stories on his bed sheets with wine, and a chicken bone. So, they take his bed sheets and his wine. Then he begins writing on his clothes with his own blood. So, they take his clothes. Then, they cut out his tongue and chain him up. Finally, he writes stories on the walls with his own excrement. I don't know if this will help you, but the point is, there are many ways to record thoughts without the use of paper.
Actually, I have a solution to this predicament. You can write a journal entry, or an excerpt from a memoir that Karen writes AFTER she is freed, and her kidnapper is in jail. This will show the story from another perspective, and it will give the story hope. Readers will know that in the end justice is found.
- Paula
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